<p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">颼颼的風</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">說來就來</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">趕著一朵朵烏云</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">像啃噬夜空的牦牛</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">是誰在遼闊的孤寂中</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">甩響時間的長鞭</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">抽疼了一個季節(jié)</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">讓許多荒草驚慌地</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">向風鞠躬</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1"><br></p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">是的 還會有一場雨</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">接踵而至</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">秋天的斑斕會與風一起</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">拱破山青收復綠水</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">殺一條路</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">奔向雪的故鄉(xiāng)</p><p class="ql-block" style="text-align:center;"><br></p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">謝謝芳芳依依老師雅賞點評</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">詩的節(jié)奏從風的驟然降臨，到荒草的驚慌，再到雨的接踵而至，最后落腳于秋向雪的奔赴，層層遞進間，既寫盡了秋末自然的蒼茫與動感，又暗含著季節(jié)更迭里的生命力，簡短幾句便勾勒出遼闊又細膩的意境 。</p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">謝謝依梅聽雪老師雅賞點評</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">佳作欣賞。</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">美詩以“風”為骨，寫得極有氣勢。開篇“牦牛”的比喻新奇有力，把風的野性具象化。最精彩的是“甩響時間的長鞭”一句，把無形的風提升到了驅動季節(jié)輪回的宏大維度，瞬間擊中了人心。</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">結尾收于“雪的故鄉(xiāng)”，意境開闊，完成了從狂放到寧靜的詩意循環(huán)，老師筆力不凡。</p> <p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">謝謝汾州文化老師雅賞點評</p><p class="ql-block ql-indent-1">颼的秋風說來就來，趕著烏云像牦?？惺梢箍?。不知是誰在孤寂里甩響時間的長鞭，抽疼了季節(jié)，嚇得荒草都向風鞠躬。之后還會下雨，秋天的斑斕會跟風一起沖破青綠、奪回綠水，開出一條路奔向有雪的地方。把秋風寫得又野又有勁兒，完全不是常見的溫柔路子，讀著特別帶感，太會寫了，必須點贊。</p> <h3>《秋步》<a href="http://m.zit.org.cn/2be1f7ew?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>網頁鏈接</a></h3> <h3>《秋雨》<a href="http://m.zit.org.cn/2genlgwn?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>網頁鏈接</a></h3> <h3>《秋葉》<a href="http://m.zit.org.cn/z98q9z5?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>網頁鏈接</a></h3> <h3>《秋思》<a href="http://m.zit.org.cn/1jg4yl7t?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>網頁鏈接</a></h3> <h3>《秋夜》<a href="http://m.zit.org.cn/2gibv85s?share_from=self&user_id=10553551&uuid=e2244838edc63326c75a4f0a07fee4e1&share_depth=1&first_share_uid=10553551&utm_medium=meipian_android&share_user_mpuuid=3658e9919f6a2750db9b84a74eb70758" target="_blank" class="link" style="line-height: 1.8;"><span class="iconfont icon-iconfontlink"> </span>網頁鏈接</a></h3> <p style="text-align: center;">――謝謝您的閱讀――</p><p style="text-align: center;">??????</p>